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Post by markcbrown on Mar 23, 2021 15:18:29 GMT
I'm sure, it's true to say, writing a blurb can be the hardest thing to do. Place the hook, set the line and cast out. I found this the other day and found it helpful. How to write the perfect blurbWell since I have been redoing my book covers (while still finishing my third novel), I thought I re-word the back cover. So here's one to examine. I appreciate your thoughts. Thank you. THE CELTIC OVAL Deep within a Welsh forest, lies an ancient secret of great mystical power. A tree, whose roots run deep, connecting the present to the past. One family kept the secret safe for centuries, until they let someone in. Trust was betrayed. An old adversary has found a way for vengeance. The Keeper’s daughter has gone missing. The last piece of the puzzle is found. A husband’s rescue, failed. The Keeper has to call upon his grandson. Cade is their last chance, as he learns the secrets and discovers his true identity. Can he restore what was lost? Will he succeed? It’s a coming-of-age adventure, where Cade discovers that the tales and stories of the Dark Ages told to him when he was a child, are actually true. The magic, the mythical beasts, the sorcerers ...all of it. |
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Post by Deleted on Mar 23, 2021 16:00:36 GMT
Sounds like an interesting fantasy story markcbrown, GOOD LUCK! |
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Post by Deleted on Mar 23, 2021 20:00:37 GMT
I'm sure, it's true to say, writing a blurb can be the hardest thing to do. Place the hook, set the line and cast out. I found this the other day and found it helpful. How to write the perfect blurbWell since I have been redoing my book covers (while still finishing my third novel), I thought I re-word the back cover. So here's one to examine. I appreciate your thoughts. Thank you. THE CELTIC OVAL Deep within a Welsh forest, lies an ancient secret of great mystical power. A tree, whose roots run deep, connecting the present to the past. One family kept the secret safe for centuries, until they let someone in. Trust was betrayed. An old adversary has found a way for vengeance. The Keeper’s daughter has gone missing. The last piece of the puzzle is found. A husband’s rescue, failed. The Keeper has to call upon his grandson. Cade is their last chance, as he learns the secrets and discovers his true identity. Can he restore what was lost? Will he succeed? It’s a coming-of-age adventure, where Cade discovers that the tales and stories of the Dark Ages told to him when he was a child, are actually true. The magic, the mythical beasts, the sorcerers ...all of it. Hmm... Trust "has been" betrayed. I would start with the last paragraph, using the title instead of "it's." Remove "Will he succeed?" Redundant. All in all, there is no room for error, no second chance. It must be a perfect pitch. Write three versions of it, at least. Let them sit for a week without looking at them, then read them with fresh eyes. It's not strong enough, but it did make me want to read the book. |
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Post by potet on Mar 23, 2021 23:19:38 GMT
Will your blurb be displayed as above when your cover is finished?
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Post by Deleted on Mar 23, 2021 23:33:36 GMT
Trust was betrayed. An old adversary has found a way for vengeance. The Keeper’s daughter has gone missing. The last piece of the puzzle is found. A husband’s rescue, failed. The Keeper has to call upon his grandson. Reminds me of an Ed Byrne gag on BBC's Mock The Week from 2017 - Unlikely Film Trailers......
"A woman with a past.
A cop with a secret.
A plumber with a shoe
A dog with a cold
A hairdresser with a Rubik's cube."
"Coming this Summer.....random things.....with stuff."
Your book may be a cracking read, but if I saw that on the back cover first I'd just be thinking of Mr. Byrne and nothing else.
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Post by markcbrown on Mar 23, 2021 23:49:56 GMT
Will your blurb be displayed as above when your cover is finished? Yes, why? |
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Post by BlueAndGold on Mar 24, 2021 1:05:44 GMT
IMHO, too much detail about the story.
The questions at the end are not necessary.
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Post by markcbrown on Mar 24, 2021 14:34:01 GMT
Thank you for your input. working on some changes.
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Post by markcbrown on Mar 24, 2021 16:56:33 GMT
This is a mix of what I had. Does it flow better, without giving too much away. Is the hook strong enough?
During his freshman year in college, Cade’s normal life was about to get un-normal. Very un-normal, and it started with a telegram. “It’s 2020! Who sends a telegram in this day and age?” Well, his Grandfather would.
Cade is about to embark on a journey that will catapult him into the Dark Ages, when he learns the truth surrounding his mother’s disappearance over fourteen years ago. His Grandfather unlocks the secrets about their Welsh ancestry.
Deep within a Welsh forest, lies an ancient secret of great mystical power. A tree, whose roots run deep, connecting the present to the past.
Their family kept this secret safe for centuries, until they let someone in.
The White Tree is a coming-of-age adventure, where Cade discovers that the tales and stories of the Dark Ages told to him when he was a child,
are actually true. The magic,
the mythical beasts, the sorcerers
...all of it
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Post by BlueAndGold on Mar 25, 2021 0:35:54 GMT
I vote succinct. A back-cover blurb with large print for fast, easy reading. Let the shopper's mind fill in the blanks. Here's my go at it using bits from the above, FWIW: The White Tree is a coming-of-age adventure. College freshman Cade discovers that the childhood stories of his family's secrets of the Dark Ages are true! The magic, the mythical beasts, the sorcerers - all of it! Upon receipt of a telegram from his grandfather, Cade’s normal life is about to get very, very un-normal...
OR, yet more succinct:
Upon receipt of a mysterious telegram from his grandfather, college freshman Cade’s normal life is about to get very, very un-normal when he learns that the childhood stories of his family's secrets of the Dark Ages are true! The magic, the mythical beasts, the sorcerers - all of it!
(But what would I know? I never pretended to be a bookseller.  )
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Post by Deleted on Mar 25, 2021 5:02:39 GMT
I vote succinct. A back-cover blurb with large print for fast, easy reading. Let the shopper's mind fill in the blanks. Here's my go at it using bits from the above, FWIW: The White Tree is a coming-of-age adventure. College freshman Cade discovers that the childhood stories of his family's secrets of the Dark Ages are true! The magic, the mythical beasts, the sorcerers - all of it! Upon receipt of a telegram from his grandfather, Cade’s normal life is about to get very, very un-normal...
OR, yet more succinct:
Upon receipt of a mysterious telegram from his grandfather, college freshman Cade’s normal life is about to get very, very un-normal when he learns that the childhood stories of his family's secrets of the Dark Ages are true! The magic, the mythical beasts, the sorcerers - all of it!
(But what would I know? I never pretended to be a bookseller. )
I like the first one. It's perfect. |
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Post by markcbrown on Mar 25, 2021 11:02:12 GMT
Excellent. See what another pair of eyes can do. That is exactly what I was wanting to do. Compact it into a powerful punch.
Thank you.
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Post by Ken on Mar 25, 2021 11:12:57 GMT
Mark, you need to edit your profile as your Spotlight link is incomplete.
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Post by BlueAndGold on Mar 25, 2021 11:44:11 GMT
Maggie, the "coming of age" line is unnecessary as we already know Cade is a college freshman. No need for duplication of information.
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Post by markcbrown on Mar 25, 2021 11:49:23 GMT
Mark, you need to edit your profile as your Spotlight link is incomplete. Thank you. I 'fixed' it |
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